Red Pen Action and Other Book Stuff

I really haven’t had much time for new writing, but I have been busy with the red pen and editing. I’ve been sitting in a doctor’s office for a couple hours at a time and so it was great way to kill some time.

I had mentioned before that while my query letter is ready to go out, I needed to make some changes to Chapter 1 of The Five Angels. It’s rough, and I know it is the weakest chapter in the book. It really doesn’t do well for me when I send out a query letter and the Agent has to read the weakest chapter in the story to be sold on me.

Chapter 1 moves VERY quickly into the story. Basically, by the end of chapter 1, as written, you are already in Nalrin, and that may be the problem. So I’m thinking about expanding Chapter 1 into at least 2 chapters in order to get CJ to Megan, the relationship advancing, and the catalyst for her teleporting them to Nalrin. That is where the story REALLY takes off.

I’m just worried that if I do that, Agent’s won’t be excited enough about the project because well, it’s all “set – up” and not enough action.


I’ve been doing a bunch of audio books since I’m spending so much time in the car. Don’t worry, my Kindle is still getting use.

First: I finished …

My verdict: I LOVED IT! It was full of a ton of twists and turns at the end and just when you thought there couldn’t be anymore, or everyone was just going to die, there was another twist. There were things about the character that I didn’t like so much, but I understand WHY she was that way.  To be fair, I think you would be a little lost in Mortal Heart if you hadn’t read Grave Mercy or Dark Triumph.

Second: I went back through and read / listened to the first two in the His Fair Assassin series, and re-reading Mortal Heart, so it was like one long story. (I’ve done this multiple times with the Throne of Glass series too.) This is a series listed on my Recommended Books in the sidebar. Each book focuses on a separate character, so you could read them as stand alones, however, it is a much more complete story if you read them in order. To be fair, I think you would be a little lost in Mortal Heart if you hadn’t read Grave Mercy or Dark Triumph.


I picked one up that had been on my “To Be Read” shelf for awhile:

Verdict: Well .. I … humm..

Here is my problem. I didn’t love it, which is why I haven’t picked up the 2nd book in the series, but I didn’t hate it either. In fact I couldn’t put it down, and I’m still thinking and dreaming about it. I’m not sure what my hesitation or “issue” is about this book. I may need to re-read (aka listen ) it to get another view on it. I don’t know if it’s because her feelings were sort of all over the place, or what.  One thing I did like was that she wasn’t your typical “Snow White” drop dead beautiful princess. She starts the book out overweight, the shunned one, the 2nd in line to the throne, married off for political gain, etc. (or was she?). She does quickly grow into her own, and you can slowly see her turning into the princess she should be.  —– See, there were things I really liked about it, and obviously Rae Carson got the story under my skin, I … I just don’t know.



Verdict: Good.

A story placed far in the future after the 4th World War, it followed a very different story line along the lines of Cinderella. Marissa Meyer very cleverly follows the storyline, without it obviously being a Cinderella story. I will be picking up the 2nd in the series Scarlet, but I’m willing to wait for it become available through the library instead of purchasing it. I’m not sure how I feel about how the story ended. I’m sure there is a reason for it, but when I read the synopsis for Scarlet, I’m appears I’m not even going to see how Cinder gets out of the prison. Meyer builds up her abilities, and then we don’t get to see how she uses them consciously? I don’t know, but I will be reading the next one. The story is a little predicable in some ways, but in others it does surprise you. I do suggest reading it.

What am I reading now?

I barely loaded this one up, so I’ll have to let you know next month what my thoughts are on it. It is part of a large series, and I have high hopes for this series. It was very highly recommended to me.


My husband needed a book series to listen to while commuting and I gave him the Legend Series by Marie Lu. He just finished the last book. One day when he came home he was like 2 or 3 chapters from the very end, and he was so frustrated and confused and mad. I told him to just finish the book and then come talk to me. I laughed so hard at him because he looks at me and says, well that was better than the way I THOUGHT they were going to end the book. So Yes, it has lots of twist at the end and I do suggest reading that one also.

Have you read any of these books? What are your thoughts?


3 thoughts on “Red Pen Action and Other Book Stuff

  1. Wow! That’s a lot of reading! Good work. I’m also stuck in the red pen/editing mode, so my writing has taken a brief decline as well. Good luck as you start querying agents!

    1. I love my story and am actually working on the 3rd book in the trilogy. I have some re-writing to do in book 2 also, but Book 1 just needs some ummfff in the first couple chapters.

  2. Sounds like you’ve been making good progress with editing and reading!

    It’s always tough knowing the balance between set up and getting into the story, hope you manage to find it! 🙂

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